Tuesday, November 9, 2010

I need your help

I'm getting this one ready for drawing class.  It is near completion but I need your critique.  Please help!  I'm looking for technical corrections.  Thanks in advance!

6 comments:

  1. Hi Kate - your image size is too small for critiquing - plus it has been either scanned or photographed so that too will affect how it looks. Secondly what was the purpose of your assignment? To faithfully reproduce a photo, or to create a drawing from a photo (two very different things, believe me!)? The only thing I can offer is that you have captured the two girls interaction very well, but apart from their clothes it all seems a bit middle toney - their skin tones are almost the same as the background; their hair colours are virtually identical, which reduces considerably the impact of your point of focus - the gaze between the two girls. Make your darks DARK and keep your lights light and use this to create drama in the image.

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  2. Hi Kate. I'm uncomfortable critiquing somebody I don't know as I feel too critical, but, I agree with curious crow about darkening the darks. The girl in white: her glasses probably need a shadow of some sort somewhere? I'd also recommend you look at the drawing in a mirror, which is my favorite way to find the flaws I've missed.

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  3. The hair on the girl with her back to us is gorgeous by the way. And I agree about the interaction - well captured.

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  4. Wonderful work on the portraits; the features are beautiful and the hair is gorgeous. Now, cast shadows? I am all for contrast of light and shadows. I agree with Jenna that the young lady facing us needs some cast shadows from the glasses and maybe her hair. I would also darken the background a bit around the veils to give some contrast. Good luck with your assignment.

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  5. Thanks very much for all the critique! Good suggestions all.

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